Emmanuella

uwalcott · 10-30-2007, 12:09 AM

E very thought of what was is a tear now
M any tears try to heal my hollow pain
M ove into the space, but slip out as you did
A fter each one leaves, it is vaster than before
N ever again will I try, and yet
U nder cold resolve is a longing still warm
E tched into my skin, it tempts me with fear
L ulls me with false possibility
L ately I have closed in on myself
A nd this slash is simply I can't know who you are

Betwixt · 11-11-2007, 11:49 AM

There's some great phrasing here! Thank you for sharing.

uwalcott · 11-12-2007, 02:41 PM

thanks betwixt, I really enjoyed all your poetry and am looking forward to reading more. You really have talent. I would like to post another of mine here.

Sisters

Without pause like the swing of the sea
Your body eased into the curve of pregnancy,
Swelled naturally in all the right places
Grew round while your skin remained taut
And in two small hours produced a flawless child
Who could already laugh and praise heaven for his perfection.

After two grueling years I finally caught
The line on the stick I could scarcely believe,
Held on to her through cruel floods of blood
And hormones. My soul and body ravaged,
Emotions crumbled. Deep lines stretched across my skin.
Eleven hours and three million seconds later
My sad, grey-blue baby came into the world,
And opened one eye at me slowly.

Betwixt · 11-12-2007, 08:40 PM

Oh wow. That is INCREDIBLE!!! The imagery is flawless, and I very much can feel what you mean. I love so many of these lines, might I share this with a few friends?

I'm kind of a snob when it comes to poetry, I have to admit. I've read a LOT because I've been writing for SO long. (I started writing when I was 11, and eventually I got better. It was pretty bad in the beginning.) So when I wax on about something, I hope you know that I'm really just wowed.

So good, Uw. Just perfect.

Kathy2579 · 11-13-2007, 10:06 PM

thank you

swamom · 11-19-2007, 01:38 PM

thanks for sharing